View Full Version : Review my SL Video please?
May the community please comment and critique it, please?
Watch it in 1080p!
Thank you!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TC_6kjL5Nmw
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TC_6kjL5Nmw
Redbridge
11-12-2011, 03:40 PM
Hey buddy,
Great video and love the music.
Two bits of feedback... PM'd ya
Skeletonlord
11-12-2011, 03:50 PM
Very good video. Could win the competition. I love the music, you went in depth on lots of different aspects!
I loved it! Brilliant Guide!
Silentarrow
11-12-2011, 04:06 PM
Great job Apollo! Maybe you could add two more songs instead of playing the same song three times?
Btw, nice pink crossbow :).
Great job Apollo! Maybe you could add two more songs instead of playing the same song three times?
Btw, nice pink crossbow :).
ROFL! True! I know, I know, you have any ideas? I'm stumped. ;(
EDIT: Also, do you think captions/text bubbles would be too interfering?
Silentarrow
11-12-2011, 04:33 PM
Chat bubbles would be nice.
These might fit
Lux Aeterna (also called Requiem for a Drem)
300 Violins.
Kahlua
11-12-2011, 06:01 PM
Great job Apollo! Maybe you could add two more songs instead of playing the same song three times?
Btw, nice pink crossbow :).
lol thats just the purple color fading into a pinkish shade :p Don't know if you're being sarcastic or not.
After watching the winning video for the PL contest...I really think these videos need voice tutorials. All that reading takes away from actually watching the video itself. Not everyone is a visual learner. If you talked through what the text said, it'd be doubling up and be a lot more clear.
Urqui
11-12-2011, 06:16 PM
Awesome video:)
Maybe get music that doesn't stop in the middle of thr video
Just a suggestion:D
Silentarrow
11-12-2011, 06:42 PM
It looks pink to me!
http://i1235.photobucket.com/albums/ff430/Silentarrowszz/a62b7e6c.jpg
Kahlua
11-12-2011, 06:46 PM
I doubt they'd name it the same thing as the epic lvl 35 handheld crossbow :p
Silentarrow
11-12-2011, 06:50 PM
I doubt they'd name it the same thing as the epic lvl 35 han
dheld crossbow :p
When he entered the CS, all the other crossbows looked purple, I'm positive it's pink :).
Kahlua
11-12-2011, 07:37 PM
Watch it in 1080p. It's 100% purple lol.
THIS is the pink crossbow :p
http://www.spacetimestudios.com/attachment.php?attachmentid=2547&stc=1&d=1321107321
Silentarrow
11-12-2011, 08:00 PM
:o :confused: Oh well, you proved me wrong +2 rep to you :).
Nightarcher
11-12-2011, 09:48 PM
1. Glad to see you more involved in SL, Parth! :)
2. It seems more like a Gameplay video than a Tutorial at this point. As well as the very good and useful in-game footage which is required, a few helpful overview tips could give new players a better idea of what SL is all about. For example:
"Star Legends is a team-oriented dungeon MMO. With a team up to 5 players, you will fight through various campaigns, each having around 5 separate areas. The last area will contain that campaign's hardest boss, often dropping the best loot."
...or something like that. You get the picture.
3. It only looks pink because of the red background. ;)
1. Glad to see you more involved in SL, Parth! :)
2. It seems more like a Gameplay video than a Tutorial at this point. As well as the very good and useful in-game footage which is required, a few helpful overview tips could give new players a better idea of what SL is all about. For example:
"Star Legends is a team-oriented dungeon MMO. With a team up to 5 players, you will fight through various campaigns, each having around 5 separate areas. The last area will contain that campaign's hardest boss, often dropping the best loot."
...or something like that. You get the picture.
3. It only looks pink because of the red background. ;)
Yeah! Thinking of retiring in PL for SL. If I win this contest, I definitely will!
Silentarrow
11-12-2011, 10:08 PM
How'd you like the songs Apollo? :)
How'd you like the songs Apollo? :)
I liked them! I figured though, it's better if I do a VoiceOver. As somebody pointed out, music detracts from the point of a "guide". So, I reworked it, will be uploading it shortly. Bear in mind, I had to speak really really really fast, so I tripped over my tongue a few times and voice was a bit higher pitched because of lack of breath. Anyways, it should be up on YouTube within 20 minutes. I'll post a link here.
Video uploaded! Check out the new one! Please critique it, don't hold back! I really appreciate all of the criticism!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=g6Rn86lA28g
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=g6Rn86lA28g
Skeletonlord
11-12-2011, 11:54 PM
Video uploaded! Check out the new one! Please critique it, don't hold back! I really appreciate all of the criticism!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=g6Rn86lA28g
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=g6Rn86lA28g
Very good Apollo! Great. I love the transitions!
It says the video is currently unavailable
Yeah, it's in the middle of processing. Stupid slow YouTube! :(
It should be uploaded now, although I realized when I was messing around with the Robo voice, I accidentally left it as that. It seems rather bad, so now I have to go back and change it. :/
Slant
11-13-2011, 04:34 AM
haha robovoice is pretty cool! lol its like one of the droids is giving commentary
Silentarrow
11-13-2011, 08:05 AM
Yep! 10-1:00 sounds like a robot :).
You should try writing out what you want to say before making the video, it'll sound a lot smoother.
Yep! 10-1:00 sounds like a robot :).
You should try writing out what you want to say before making the video, it'll sound a lot smoother.
I tried that aspect, but then I go too fast, so I had to improvise. :(
Anyways, here is the new one.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XF72Ecwfb2s
MoarPewPew
11-13-2011, 12:34 PM
I tried that aspect, but then I go too fast, so I had to improvise. :(
Anyways, here is the new one.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XF72Ecwfb2s
I think you did a great job. I would re do your voice over because it was not that smooth. You know what I mean? I would right a script if you have not already. And I would make the basic commands scroll slower. Hard to read without pauseing. Other than that great editing skills and you did a great job!
I think you did a great job. I would re do your voice over because it was not that smooth. You know what I mean? I would right a script if you have not already. And I would make the basic commands scroll slower. Hard to read without pauseing. Other than that great editing skills and you did a great job!
Looks like I'll need to practice with a script and time it then, lol. I always end up reading too fast. :D
BodMaster
11-13-2011, 01:29 PM
I think you did a great job. I would re do your voice over because it was not that smooth. You know what I mean? I would right a script if you have not already. And I would make the basic commands scroll slower. Hard to read without pauseing. Other than that great editing skills and you did a great job!
Agreed what was said was great, it was just the stumbles over your words and breaks in-between the breaks. If you scripted what was said through your voice over that would be good as you wouldn't have any break ups.
And the Vid is 5.01 is this allowed not much over but, don't want to be taken out due to a small technicality like that :)
Slant
11-13-2011, 01:30 PM
^the pl vid was 5:04 but the vid can be snappier in both editing and the vo
ps check pm
Agreed what was said was great, it was just the stumbles over your words and breaks in-between the breaks. If you scripted what was said through your voice over that would be good as you wouldn't have any break ups.
And the Vid is 5.01 is this allowed not much over but, don't want to be taken out due to a small technicality like that :)
Last time, a few seconds over was aloud. The thing is, when I upload. It says 5 minute video, but when it's on YouTube, it's 5:04. I don't get why.
I'll try and script it later to see if it works better. Talking really fast makes it hard to think of what to say. Lmao. I'm surprised I didn't stumble over everything.
Good video, hope it helps all of the new players ready to join the vast starlegends community
Okay, scripted my voice, so once this video is done uploading, I'll post the link here. It should be about 20 minutes. Please critique this one as well. I added background music, but kept my voice in.
Here is the video, please critique it further if you can! I really appreciate all the great criticism I'm getting! :)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=R4KYDULzV0I
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=R4KYDULzV0I
Silentarrow
11-13-2011, 08:11 PM
It won't play for me, it may just be my browser?
Kahlua
11-13-2011, 08:12 PM
Good to see you took my advice on the voice tutorial :)
Now just work on your timing and your smoothness and it'll be awesome!
It won't play for me, it may just be my browser?
It was still being processed by YouTube. Check now? :)
BodMaster
11-13-2011, 08:32 PM
It won't play for me, it may just be my browser?
Works finebhere buddy :)
Noe that was alot! Smoother good Job as Pew said still need to pop in and slow that font down only a little for Shortcut 'Commands' and quite a bit for the CS text to quick to read :)
May need to play about with the music volume a little more if you want it spot on! Though I really liked the music in the background some parts you could hear the music more than your voice had to keep playing with my volume to make it fully clear. This is me just being picky now :p but I do really think you need to change the font speed just slower on the parts mentioned above ;)
Awesome job overall buddy!
Silentarrow
11-13-2011, 09:09 PM
Looks great!
Slowed down the titles a bit. I THINK this one should be the final.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jnXE7O9khms
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jnXE7O9khms
Phoenixking
11-13-2011, 10:22 PM
Textto fast lol in the / stuff lol just saying other than that GRET JOB! I thumbs up your video