Okay but somehow this is definitely an essay to read. It took me 15-20 minutes to finish.

The writer has a great introduction that draws the reader in tells what will be discussed in thread.

Body paragraph - each of them has a strong argument and support is precise purposefully and strongly connected to the OP’s ideas and impressions.

I’d say the OP’s voice is confident. However, the tone is not that good.

The writing is skillfully developed. But key note, be careful with run-ons.

Prof reading and editing precision is mandatory but I’ll take it.

Lastly, strong conclusion that conclude the essay with questions, anecdote, or statements that review the theme under discussion.